the comment i left on brianna short story

Your story was good. I got the feeling from reading your story that the boy was trying to be some thing that he is not. Like he was trying to act hard so people won't think he's soft and try to be mean to him. The part was funny when you showed how the guy disrespecting the girl, because some guy are just like that dat . The only thing is that they just aren't as out there out there as you mad the guy in your story, thats why it was so funny. over all your short story was really cool