evan

I think your paper was off to a very good start. It helped me out a lot, with understanding what my paper should look like so thank you. The only thing i think you should do is make your paper a little more personal like Andy told use in class. you should had what cool ,means to you and how the topic of cool you talked about in your paper is important to you its a very small thing but i think it would make your paper more enjoyable to read because it would not be fact after fact. I'm not saying you have to get to personal but just enough to make your reader want to get through your whole paper but other then that i think your off to a great start.